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    dots Submission Name: Desert Dreamerdots
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    Author: MrBear
    ASL Info:    19/M/Ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 59/109/48
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    what if you were a Desert Dreamer?
    coldest nights coyotes howl
    hunger headaches, concern for dinner
    hottest days the vultures prowl

    obsessed with eating refreshing fruits
    wake up to chewing shrubberies
    exotic tastes with the sweetest juice
    kiwis, oranges, and strawberries

    what if you were a Desert Dreamer?
    without water hot and steaming
    looking at clouds as nourishment
    you envy the heavens that hold them

    ~ Teddy Dayton ~




    Submitted on 2010-07-05 06:49:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice nice i love it!! i assume now your teddy lol. anyhew i'm glad to see this post has comments its a really good peice

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2010-07-15 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      good indeed - it short and melody. it captures lovely visions.
    i like i like....good write...

    fav line: look at the clouds as nourishment
    you envy the heavens that hold them
    | Posted on 2010-07-06 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      That made me bloody thirsty :D I am not the most observant reader but the rhyme scheme and general language made this poem wholly appealing. Though I can't explain exactly why I like it I hope you appreciate that I think it's pretty damn good :D
    | Posted on 2010-07-06 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]
      I am a desert dreamer.

    And I really enjoyed your take on spiritual hunger. It sort of rhymed but not really which worked just fine for this (in my opinion). I look forward to more postings. Happy writing!
    | Posted on 2010-07-05 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]


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