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    dots Submission Name: I am Medots
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    Author: Crimsonpathways
    Elite Ratio:    5.96 - 202/226/57
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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    Description:
       This really doesn't have a thought-out title. I just slapped one on there. I like this poem, as choppy as it is. Haven't written in a while, again. That is just my style.

    Anyway, this one is about me, straight up. It explains the way I am. I chill and go with the flow of life. I will never win the best friend of the year award, but I do as I please. I am a wild horse, and that will never change.


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    dotsI am Medots
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    Please donít feel sad,
    It was never meant to be
    All those dreams,
    We were writing in the sand.

    When you think of me,
    Consider the happy times
    Before it changed,
    Like it was bound to.

    My personality,
    It has one fatal flaw
    Friendship is shiny,
    A spark of light in the dark.

    This world is not kind,
    I am not sure it is my place
    Belonging to nothing,
    An unfinished poem, I am.

    For this is this,
    And that is truly all it is
    It will never suit my fancy.




    Submitted on 2010-07-05 23:47:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Words to calm you, then hit with a strong sense of darkness? That's what I got from it.

    Over all, to fancy it would be a stretch. Your work is fine here ( I will not that I haven't read your older words)

    I would work on how a few lines were phrased.

    "For this is this,
    And that is truly all it is"

    This specifically made me tilt my head and question your marbles. I know some people love repetition, I don't. So don't take my full word on it.

    And lastly, use a different set of words.

    But I like the dark touch; THAT has always been my fancy.
    | Posted on 2010-07-07 00:00:00 | by Dark Dann | [ Reply to This ]


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