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    dots Submission Name: Nightlightdots
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    Author: isis_lenore
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 459/207/102
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsNightlightdots
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    The stars watched us realize our insignificance
    Centered in their universe, while we spin around
    An inky night sky, aglow, with the pulsing night

    Against a fervent night sky they pulse with a fire
    We yearned for their brilliant heat- we never will feel.

    Caught like flies; fooled by strands of a spiderís silky web
    We lie disoriented against manicured lawns; speechless
    The gravity of distance, weighing heavy against our hearts
    Bleeding tears of longing begot from this awareness of loss.

    With the inconclusiveness of consequences still pending
    The skiesí bruised slate gives rise to the light of a new day




    Submitted on 2010-07-06 07:50:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Each night is unique, and its night sky spectacular and special; and each night ends with the dawning of yet another new day!

    I especially liked:

    "With the inconclusiveness of consequences still pending
    The skiesí bruised slate gives rise to the light of a new day"

    Nice work, pretty lady!
    | Posted on 2010-07-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      This really caught my attention, I really loved the vocabulary used in this work. Might I ask what was it that made you write this?
    | Posted on 2010-07-07 00:00:00 | by cherrywillow | [ Reply to This ]


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