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    dots Submission Name: Perfection At It's Bestdots
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    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       this is a poem for my boyfriend <3


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    dotsPerfection At It's Bestdots
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    A smile so brilliant
    It brings light to all
    Mid-night skies,
    And makes up for
    When the sun does not shine.

    A voice so melodic
    It is unforgettable
    Like a warm caressing
    Summer breeze.

    Eyes so deep and thoughtful
    A most amazing sight to see.
    I am lost within your eyes
    And I wish never to escape.

    You are a childish dream come true,
    You fill my life with beautiful serenity.
    I'm sure my heart just knew
    but really who am I to say?
    You just seem so perfect in every way

    You are perfection that
    The hand of an angel created.
    You are so many things,
    However, I am at a loss for words
    Because you always leave me breathless




    Submitted on 2010-07-06 21:15:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You do a good job of describing that wonderful feeling that comes over one when the one they love appears. Us guys are worse than you lovely gals, I think; I used to feel almost "tonguetied" when my lady love appeared, and became absolutely clumsy!

    Delightful poem.
    | Posted on 2010-08-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahh, love. Always quick to inspire we poets. I love some of the imagery, even if it is a bit cliché (what's love without cliché?). I do feel after rereading it a few times that the second and third stanzas would flow better if the were together in a single stanza, it just seems like they were meant to be together. Nice write, keep it up!
    | Posted on 2010-07-12 00:00:00 | by Phall | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww I can totally relate to this... Your boyfriend is so lucky to have you. xx
    | Posted on 2010-07-11 00:00:00 | by Piper | [ Reply to This ]


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