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    dots Submission Name: black cherry rumdots
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    Author: caster
    ASL Info:    31.M.MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 136/280/161
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 932
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1650



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    dotsblack cherry rumdots
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    keep your stomach all tied up in knots
    i may be in the need of a noose
    and keep that priest by the phone
    cause i don't think these last rites took
    am i rising or just confused by the fall?
    On my way down but so sure of myself
    convinced i never really knew your name
    so what am i whispering into your grave

    you've become a ghost
    of a ghost
    substituting regret for fear and
    i've grown so bitter at looking
    right through
    you or whoever you've decided
    to be this week

    save the scarf that you used to cover my eyes
    the looks your giving got me shivering
    and keep that girl on her toes
    cause i don't think you want her to know
    left me with nothing feeling right at all
    kept you alive like a pretty tourniquet
    wanted so badly to keep your lungs in your chest
    but you breathe out such bitterness

    you've become a ghost
    of a ghost
    substituting regret for fear and
    i've grown so bitter at looking
    right through
    you or whoever you've decided
    to be this week

    tried to lay you to rest
    but you buried yourself
    and you want a requiem
    but this is all i have left
    i tried to lay you to rest
    but you buried yourself

    you've become a ghost
    of a ghost
    substituting regret for fear and
    i've grown so bitter at looking
    right through
    you or whoever you've decided
    to be this week




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