i really like the emotions behind this poem, they ring very loudly, clearly and realistically. i would suggest parsing down the line lengths and get straight to the points that will really impact a reader. So a line like:
If I knew of all the events that have occurred
could become: If I knew every event to occur
and a line like:
Could have any one of these events been prevented?
could be: Could one have been prevented?
you have real impact here because of your resolution, its a sad resolution, you seem resigned to your suicide (which i can relate to, but remember you are so much stronger than you realize and your writing, if it really means a lot to you, can give you real purpose when you feel down). if you really focus on he intent of the poem and make each word, each line work towards that intent you will have something very impressive here.
if you decide to do a rewrite i would love to have a look. hope this was helpful and thanks for the words on the Untitled piece, its only untitled cause i honestly can't think of a name for it, suggestions are welcome. thanks again -roy