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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Iridescence face - Brilliance displace
    Iridescent smile - Wile amongst guile

    It's had enough - Enough is enough -- enough...

    It has buried itself deep inside.
    Can't you see it? Right there at the edge of the light!
    Goryo; spread your vengeance, let them fear your might - come a fortnight -- tonight...

    A terror to all senses, it climbs above and below the fences - so defenseless.

    It's white washed face - pale; starved for what it craved.
    Illustrious lips, thin with a lacquer film- Sopping with guilt -- How will it make things right?
    Eyes - passing through in an attempt to remain forever after...
    Eyes - filled with shame for the passion, forever thereafter, filled with lies in your search to find--
    The mirror smiled back - vengeance is defined by these moments maligned--

    Iridescent light - take back time...

    She was a saint, a savior of beauty - Emerald eyes -- Will 'o' the wisp leading man to burn at night.
    Forever captured - love hurts, a sweet demise but that night she felt alive -- Whimpering "vengeance is mine."
    Feeling her velvety skin graze over your petrified face - It was a game she played, a master of her lustful trade.
    Love was just a word, as sand was just dirt.

    Iridescence displaced - The shadows about faced

    Let her spirit feel that rush once more -

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