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    dots Submission Name: Let Me Falldots
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    Author: AvanMavarice
    ASL Info:    19/f/owls town
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/1/4
    Words: 340
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
    Total Views: 632
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    Description:
       late night, early morning. alone, with soothing music on. had a picure in my mind, then flew out this piece, for some "impossible" love between a human and a vampire, or an angel with a devil...


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    dotsLet Me Falldots
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    let me fall
    catch me in your arms
    let me feel
    breathe onto my cheeks
    and hold me tight
    so tight as if the sunlight will be the solid end
    to everything we are at this special moment

    our bodies were so close
    i felt your breath, it's so gentle
    baby dont let go of my hand
    i want to dance with you all night
    every second im here with you is forever, romantically
    the moment is cardiac

    i see brightness in this dark room
    wherever you be leads me to the light
    it's the flame, the fire flashing on and off
    again and again

    touch me now, let me feel your fingers sliding away on my skin
    give me a hot passionate kiss, gently
    my heart belongs to you at this very moment
    it is yours with sweetness

    your gorgeous shadow i see, is following and running
    suddenly you came to me within a blink, while i closed my eyes
    this surprisingly
    your arms surround me, you look into my eyes while smilling

    a fit of sadness rushing into my heart
    im falling
    things will be all gone, as the light comes through the window tomorrow
    lets keep moving
    as if this darkness in this room is all we have
    and our hasty, gentle love

    i will remember the smell of this atmosphere we share tonight
    this soothing piece of violin music we replay over and over
    my heart's reaching out flying up to the moon
    with the same silence in this room
    and the flame you raise and my happiness when im watching you
    my eyes are gone blind
    as soon as the sunshine reaches the floor of this room
    my blood is gone frozen in the body
    just when you disappear out of my sight
    baby im gone, soon
    hold me tighter, let me kiss your eyes once again
    before the sunshine comes in, for the last time
    let me say it once again
    i love you






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