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    dots Submission Name: Jdots
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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    27 Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261/310/148
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Thought this up in the car ride home from shooting guns


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    I search for you--
    through tinted glass in paralleled lines
    of death machines driving steadily
    towards a destination unknown--
    I search for the scent that may linger
    along the trail in which you travel.
    My eyes follow black cars,
    one of them--by chance--may contain you
    with your loud industrial thrill-like sounds
    and your sweet hidden smile behind
    a milky, shaded view.
    Desperate to smell, to taste, to feel it again;
    I will circle round once more to where we once stood
    eager in youth and foolish in pride.
    So when we mix in glee or confusion
    I can reach passed the walls placed between us
    by unrecognizable fear of losing--lost we have become--
    and together we will fight for it as we should have,
    would have done, in the first place
    had we not been so blind to our own naivety.




    Submitted on 2010-07-11 18:38:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yes !!!! good job - i really like this artful poem of beauty and art .../. i'll have too read it again / not out of confusion - but bliss and sublime ../

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    My eyes follow black cars,
    one of them--by chance--may contain you
    with your loud industrial thrill-like sounds
    and your sweet hidden smile behind
    a milky, shaded view.
    | Posted on 2010-07-14 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is heartfelt i love it!!! certain parts i like the most but its all nicely written... what inspired this write?

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2010-07-14 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      My eyes follow black cars,
    one of them--by chance--may contain you


    I used to do that a lot. I used to look in taxis and see if I knew anyone in them. I would watch mail trucks drive down and see if they're going toward my house. I would look for a certain car and think that the person I want driving that car is in fact, them. But it never really happened, and I think back to those days a lot. I feel like a nice chunk of me drove off with those cars and trucks and taxis- that little hopeful part. People don't come for you. People don't want to go out of their way to be with you. But you do it for others anyways, always look out for them and keep an eye out for their shoes, or the back of their heads.

    I will circle round once more to where we once stood
    eager in youth and foolish in pride.
    So when we mix in glee or confusion
    I can reach passed the walls placed between us
    by unrecognizable fear of losing--lost we have become--


    Isn't that true. We always go back, and we're always lost. We go back to feel if we're still present there, somehow. Like visiting a grave- visiting because they're still there. But dead. You go back to these places and there's a little glimmer that thinks that if you stay long enough, life will blackout and it'll resurface back to the time you were there with that someone, that something special you always go back for. But there's no such thing as life going into a coma and backward. So you stand there, the reason lost.

    What a great poem. So damn true.
    | Posted on 2010-07-11 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]


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