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    dots Submission Name: Feeding the Monsterdots
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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFeeding the Monsterdots
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    The picture is a side profile,
    your head tilted slightly down,
    jawline deep soil-brown
    and cheeks like dark sand.

    You seem lost to a wayward thought, like
    Joyceís Gretta, a symbol of something,
    that unknown something nestled deep in the corners of my mind,
    its head shoved down stubbornly into its murky brown crevices.

    My God, youíre something to look at.
    Lips thick, stalwart, downturned,
    set like the decision youíre about to make
    trumps all others thus faró

    But youíre only reading a fiction novel,
    eyes scanning, two frantic lackeys scurrying across the words,
    collecting, storing, feeding the pacing monster.
    I watch through your ear as it growls, preparing to devour its meal.

    It pokes its disproportionate head out at times,
    peering, sizing me up, its snarl
    whooshing violently out of flared nostrils.
    I stare back, unfazed, flare my nostrils in rebuttal.

    One of these days the two of usíll be friends,
    it will crawl sheepishly out of framed photos of you,
    sidling up to me, Iíll stroke its two-dimensional scales,
    feed it some more desperate words, send it on its merry way.




    Submitted on 2010-07-11 19:16:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is a wonderful write. You obviously have a darkness in you that needs to come out on paper...lol
    keep em coming.

    Sir Mister Pestiferous ;/
    | Posted on 2010-07-11 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]


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