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    dots Submission Name: A Borrowed Bookdots

    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsA Borrowed Bookdots

    Scrawls in the margins—
    haphazard interpretations—
    are a collection of torn pieces
    that coalesce to form the map
    of his brain.

    In a quiet room, curtains drawn,
    this typed line now under my finger
    must have drawn spark from his heart,
    a faint line eked out from his pencil
    beneath the glowing words.

    I run a soft finger over his scribble,
    feel the slight indent of the lead
    from doggedness of pressing,
    see where the m’s become slanted cursive,
    each waltzing into the next.

    On a rabid hunt for secret messages,
    I read lone underlined words
    as if to create a sentence, feeling silly when they end up
    “Lacquer translucence chrysanthemum
    copper fog-toned lavish paintbox.”

    I’ve mislead myself. On the epic journey
    through typed and scribbled words
    pencil has trumped ink.
    I’ve decoded, encoded, traced, even laid my ear upon
    the words as if up to a whooshing seashell.

    On our next meeting he asks So how
    did you like it and I stare blankly.
    I say Oh you know it was great like you said
    I say I bet you could’ve written it better
    and laugh a bit to myself.

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