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    dots Submission Name: The Illusion of Freedom dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 295
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Illusion of Freedom dots

    How many lies have now become the truth
    Deception inside a tunnel vision
    And squandered upon the slaughter block
    The lives you deserve

    Brought low to a simpletons anthem
    That by greed has purchased your soul
    And caged within the illusion of freedom
    Conscripts to the map of your own misdirection

    Turn angels into the puppet clowns
    The staunch and ever willing criminals
    Behind the stab in the back
    Of histories ordinary people

    So many liars have now become truth peddlers
    While to their addiction you ply yourselves
    To defend the scraps you are so miserably tossed
    So starved of love and so glutted with fear

    It is a mean and spiteful dirt which infects you
    A callous blood of no concern for you
    And patronised with itís slick and grinning mesmerism
    Builds the walls of your prison

    What part of mindless have you been given to
    Bombarded into submission from the day you were born
    The tiny cogs inside the wheels
    Which keep their cupidity afloat

    And bow that, for the brainwashed back
    The ever entropy of the next fad gadget
    And suck on the straws of your commercialised lives
    Believe hard, because you have to

    Wear your ticktack and stuck on labels
    Your fashionable points the view to opinions
    Wear your god like some throw away T shirt
    And cower in the corners of your heart

    Such glistening golden diamante chains which bind you
    A bird in a cage blinded by incarceration
    Such tiny lives you lead
    While all of creation wheels around you

    You have no choice
    You were born into the slavery of acceptance
    The false promises which bleat the sheep in unison
    With the illusion of freedom

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