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    dots Submission Name: No one will Noticedots

    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 416
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       i do not understand where this came from, i do not feel this way at all but when i sat down to write today this is what came out on paper...

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    dotsNo one will Noticedots

    In a room all alone, sits a girl
    So filled with sadness she donít see the sun.
    A never ending night fills her empty head,
    Unnoticed by her are the tears she cries.
    Looking at the pill bottle in hand.

    A pain so unbearable, she sees no other way
    To silence the words and hate she gets every day,
    A lost hope to herself, she begins to write a letter.

    Should anyone notice Iím gone
    Donít hate me for what you caused,
    When I was down you were not around,
    When I needed just one person, I found none
    All that found me was hate and invisibility.
    I never tried to hurt people, but you never could see me.
    I tried to call for help, but only found locked doors,
    I tried to find you only to find an empty city.
    And now you will find an empty room,
    Though Iím sure you wonít notice, no one will.
    The school will not call, teachers wonít think of the empty place.
    My classmates will carry on, for no one sees
    What I could not hide.

    With her letter complete, no final goodbye
    Why should she when no one would care anyway.
    She gets up from the bed and sets the letter down,
    Wandering once more into the daylight she sits on her roof,
    To see the last sunset that use to calm her down.

    Her parents might walk into her room, or pass by like they do,
    The pills that are gone might be the only reason they know.
    The bottle of water in her hand has long since gone warm,
    But why did she care if it was cold, it would be her last bottle.

    So many pills she starts to have second thoughts,
    What if just one person cared, would it change her mind?
    A mental list runs through her head of her days that go by,
    She finds not one kindness in the memories, and swallows her pills.

    Now all she has to do is wait for the sun to set,
    And she will go to sleep like she always does,
    Only she will never wake to this hateful world again.
    Unnoticed for the last time, one too many tears,
    Made her end it all after a battle that no one saw,
    Not one person did she have, she wonders what a friend,
    Would be like but knows itís much too late now

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