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    dots Submission Name: Mom?...Mommydots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
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       I need you... so where are you?


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    dotsMom?...Mommydots
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    In your eyes I committed a sin
    In your eyes I disobeyed Gods rules

    I attempted to take my life
    I failed miserably as you can see

    Still alive I assumed you'd look at this attempt as a cry for HELP
    No..
    Instead I am more worthless for I have committed a sin...
    A child of God tried taking her life...
    This child of God is your daughter...

    So now you no longer speak to me
    Mom...Mommy...
    I need you

    I need to know why can you not forgive me?
    When I have forgiven you?!
    He abused me
    My Step Father...
    Your Husband...

    You knew of this and yet looked the other way...
    WHY?
    ...

    My heart is aching for...
    your love...
    your attention...
    your acceptance...




    Submitted on 2010-07-13 19:54:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can feel the pain through this piece and deeply understand how it feels to be misunderstood.

    I'm happy you're still alive. Great writing.


    ~ Teddy Dayton ~
    | Posted on 2010-07-16 00:00:00 | by MrBear | [ Reply to This ]


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