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    dots Submission Name: Personal Game of Tug-A-Wardots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Depressed
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       Mom what can I do...please... Mom say something.. anything?


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    dotsPersonal Game of Tug-A-Wardots
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    I look for you all the time
    I catch myself doing double takes thinking it may just be you!
    Its possible you have come to find me?
    To mend old wounds!
    To speak of what I long to get out in the open!
    I see your color hair & instantly I gasp for air in hopes and disbelief...

    My disbelief lingers there
    for a reason and each time its proven its self over my hopes of that person being you!

    Mom, I miss you like the ocean bed would miss its waves of sea water had it up & left,
    I miss you the way sky's would miss its stars.

    I hate you yet
    I miss you!
    I can't stand you
    yet I search for you
    I despise what you allowed him to do to me
    (YOUR ONLY DAUGHTER)
    nevertheless I MISS YOU

    I am battling myself ... You are no longer apart of this simply life I lead yet you still have control, as does my Step Father the one whom you allowed to abuse me to gain material objects...

    Both of you are the root to all evil I HATE and LOVE each of you equally!!!!




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      "I see your color hair & instantly I gasp for air in hopes and disbelief... "

    I've had this issue with someone I loved.. I would see her features everywhere in other people. Great writing


    ~ Teddy Dayton ~
    | Posted on 2010-07-16 00:00:00 | by MrBear | [ Reply to This ]
      very strong words .../. powerful poem !!!!
    not to long - just right.. / i don't hate my adopted mother; on the other hand i wish i had a mother to hate and love ../.

    robbie

    this goes in my fav list
    | Posted on 2010-07-14 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]


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