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    dots Submission Name: The Waters Edgedots

    Author: whirl
    ASL Info:    33/F/Scotland
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 886/666/92
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       last one...short piece in a scot dielect.

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    dotsThe Waters Edgedots

    Come sit wi' me at the waters edge,
    an' we'll watch the sun go doon,
    I'll hol' your haun, an' you'll hol' mine,
    an' we'll wait 'til we see the moon.

    We'll stay a' nicht at the waters edge,
    an' send each star a wish,
    then, jist afore we head haime,
    we'll share a secret kiss.

    Tae have tae hide a love so raw,
    must surely be a crime,
    but, again we'll meet at the waters edge,
    until the end o' time.

    Submitted on 2010-07-14 12:54:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love your Scottish poems! This one is delightful, and is perfect in metre, scansion, and rhyme. Oh how I would love to hear you recite this!

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2010-07-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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