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    dots Submission Name: Space Ships ( 1 & 2 )dots
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    Author: col13x
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsSpace Ships ( 1 & 2 )dots
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    Space Ships

    to be out amongst the stars
    to hold in view the sublime lights of origination
    and see in my tiny palm
    a shinning galactic heart
    I, a grain of sand
    imagining by distance
    to be an ocean

    To be out amidst the stars
    where nebula and mote
    experience birth and death
    in endless time
    to feel all initiation surrounding me
    and I like some pre antiquarian fish
    gliding with ease

    To be gathered with the stars
    and shuck off the bond of gravity
    to let loose the constraints of imagination
    and so passing unhindered to eternity
    to discover the vistas of a universal nation
    encountering actual life

    To be out riding with the stars
    never again to be constrained
    to peer through clouds
    instead to witness the spectacle
    the awesome unrepeatable dimensions
    in the monumental beauty of our true abode

    To be out there with the stars
    and be in part the eyes and ears of my author
    an intelligence exulting made perfection
    understanding that from the smallest
    to the incomprehensibly endless
    to become a grain of sand
    I am born in the celestial furnaces

    To be there
    just to be there
    out there with the stars
    and contain in my eye the reality of being
    all the empirical majesty of conceptions creation
    to hold in my survey
    if only for a moment
    my parent and my home

    Space Ships 2


    The sail of dusted eternity revolves
    Central pulses
    These longings linger in this blood
    To sweep amongst them
    In open arms
    Echoes through my heart

    Yet dust, this grit of earthbound
    Reverberates its forgetfulness
    And speaks, with foreign tongue
    The praises of its prison

    Ah ! Night
    When I can peer towards
    The poetry of my soul
    And poise there within the stars
    And whisper
    Home

    And yet, the stains of captive
    The mummified walk of a treacherous focus
    Beats terminal
    Drumming its message of hopeless with velveteen claws

    Sweet truth of aching stars
    In each cell my body calls
    To lift me on some phantasmagorical wing
    Carry me away
    Away from this slow bond
    This tiny mind of little Earth

    I wish no more to shed these tears
    For the darkness I cannot touch
    And I wish no more to peer through clouds
    Or swallow the impossibility of my birth

    Oh ! sweet creation
    Return me to the knowing
    Let me feel again the presence of
    And single mote
    In the hands of God
    Release me

    Take me
    Home






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      great title .... / strong insightful-emotion , concrete will of power ...i think and i think and i note to myself i could art(paint) this poem...this is avery good peice

    robbie

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