i think that the sentiment of this piece is lovely. however, it tells and fails to show. what i mean by this is that this piece would be amazing if it had some imagery interposed through out.
i love you so much...
is a very bland opening. (imo, pls dont be offended with my comment/critique). almost anything would be better in its place. start dramatic, as it were.
i "my heart whispers words of love...(corny, i know, but you get the point).
all i can do is cling...
i cling to you as an eaglet taking its first flight...(corny...yes, but you get the point again). eaglets cling for life upon the back of their mothers when they learn to fly.
overall, its good, but images throughout would make it amazing. thanks for the read.