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    dots Submission Name: I Dream In Colourdots
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    Author: whirl
    ASL Info:    33/F/Scotland
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 886/666/92
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsI Dream In Colourdots
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    Lilac swirls, raspberry ripple,
    Blue ink, splash and stipple.
    Pink faces, baby blue eyes,
    Yellow sun in vast azure skies.

    Red dragon, wisps of white cloud,
    Gold glitter, black satin shroud,
    Soft peach, vibrant grass green,
    Deep cherry, vanilla ice cream.

    Butterfly wings in purple haze,
    Amethyst blanket, chilly, grey days,
    Masses of colour float and drift on,
    Hazel eyes open, flash of silver, it's gone.




    Submitted on 2010-07-15 16:50:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Like a dream this reads! The mood is sleepy, but the images are vivid!

    I love this:

    "Red dragon, wisps of white cloud,
    Gold glitter, balck satin shroud,
    Soft pech, vibrant grass green,
    Deep cherry, vanilla ice cream."

    Aaaah then, but all dreams end, and the black and white of reality captures us again!

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2010-07-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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