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    dots Submission Name: Dark Lorddots

    Author: whirl
    ASL Info:    33/F/Scotland
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 886/666/92
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsDark Lorddots

    You have become my Dark Lord,
    And I am your Godess of Sin,
    The story of your life is over,
    Let the tale of your death begin.
    The blackness in your eyes thrills me,
    Sends shivers down my spine,
    I knew once you had tasted evil,
    That I could make you mine.
    One sip and you're intoxicated,
    One touch and I'm undone,
    Display for me your power,
    Show me that I have won.
    Chase the lowly lifeform,
    Bring me a mortal on which to feast,
    Yes, you are a delight to me,
    Now that your soul has been released.
    We roam only by moonlight,
    When appetities and lusts are strong,
    You will feed me willingly,
    I will love you all night long.
    Together we'll stand, side by side,
    Never to be torn apart,
    And for a black eternity,
    You have my stone cold heart.
    Your blood you'll spill to nourish me,
    You will obey my every demand,
    I will ensure your desires are fulfilled,
    I am yours at your command.
    Voracious now is my hunger,
    Will you help me slake this need?
    This desire I have is burning,
    It is for you I have this greed.
    I want you now to taste these lips,
    Let me engulf you with this flame,
    I need to hear you groan with pleasure,
    And scream my name in pain.

    Submitted on 2010-07-15 17:04:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This dark and sinister, and absolutely brilliant. It is lusty and powerful, and reads almost like a novel.

    I feel from the confidence of this Vamp that she is absolutely gorgeous and irresistable, and knows it!

    Excellent work!
    | Posted on 2010-07-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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