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    dots Submission Name: Con Mandots

    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       bored. i dont care. stupid name. stupid poem. bored.

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    dotsCon Mandots

    "'Lo!" Says he. Guarded by plea.
    Triumphant in life through the golden hue.
    Walking in stock, taking that which due.
    A watch and a chain. Skipping with a leap, while holding a cane.
    Wickedly blessed by the devil at best.
    And to torment he suffers the blame.
    Of all he cheated by name.

    His voice cracks and gives.
    He dies then lives.
    Eternity in hell.
    To the wicked chime of purgatory's bell.
    The last thing he speaks before silenced forever.
    "Mercy" And nothing after.

    Submitted on 2010-07-15 20:53:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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