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    dots Submission Name: Love Doesn't Quit.dots

    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       ~For T.R.S. I love you girl.

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    dotsLove Doesn't Quit.dots

    I give you this heart in hopes you'll stay.
    But in the end, my well being you'll slay.

    The truth is haunting. Forever taunting.
    Gripping at my sleeve. Like some demonic pet peeve.
    The hour turns twelve. Into hell we delve.
    Five long years to wait. The cruel hand of fate.

    I give you this heart in hopes you'll stay.
    But in the end, my well being you'll slay.

    My undying love for you. In all you hold true.
    Has stuck to me like glue. With your glowing hue.
    Angellic at best. You put my patience to the test.
    And hurt me like all the rest. And ripped my heart out of my chest.

    I'd give you my heart, but you already stole it.
    I will not run, for love doesn't quit.

    Submitted on 2010-07-16 00:52:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ~Snapz~.. very very good job. The flow is great.. the emotions are raw and relentless. It's not easy finding something like this everyday. I always like finding the works of others that have yet to be commented, but this makes me slide to the edge of my seat in anticipation for reading the next piece of work I click on. Bravo!
    | Posted on 2010-08-16 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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