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Commercial Drive


Author: lynn marsters
ASL Info:    20/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49 /61 /32
Words: 32
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Commercial Drive



Insects rule the Earth
Flowers fake the fucking

Aching to full berth
Chickens allways shitting

Tangerine and Tourmaline
Generic pantomime

Kyanite and forest green
They're lying all the time




Submitted on 2010-07-16 17:02:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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