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Submission Name:
Commercial Drive
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Author:
lynn marsters
ASL Info:
20/f/canada
Elite Ratio:
3.41 - 49/61/32
Words:
32
Class/Type:
Misc/Misc
Total Views:
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267
Description:
Commercial Drive
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Insects rule the Earth
Flowers fake the fucking
Aching to full berth
Chickens allways shitting
Tangerine and Tourmaline
Generic pantomime
Kyanite and forest green
They're lying all the time
Submitted on 2010-07-16 17:02:26
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