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    dots Submission Name: toss and turndots
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    Author: dreamyeyes
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 0/0/8
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
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    i toss and turn
    and wake up to what
    i thought was you
    this heart of mine longs
    to find the love i felt with you
    is this just a dream
    it cant be true
    its not real
    because you wouldnt leave
    so now my heart beats
    to a different drum
    everything changed
    its not the same
    so i toss and turn
    to find my place
    and ill search forever
    to find that love you gave me




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