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    dots Submission Name: Love?..Wheredots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Passion
    Total Views: 476
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 896



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       how can we love if we're still hating one another


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    dotsLove?..Wheredots
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    Lost within my own mind
    trapped by my own thoughts
    a mouse stuck within a maze, I feel
    its a game I cannot win
    yet I keep at it each & everyday
    pushing threw the pain
    pulling back all my pent up rage
    hiding them under the rug, if you will

    Its an okay place for this pain...
    numbing myself I am
    For I am tired of being in agony
    Exhausted by these heart wrenching feelings given to me by others
    I long to know the feeling of true love
    One, such as myself may even wonder...

    Does true love even exist?
    How can people watch the news?
    Nothing but people killing people
    Cheating spouses
    Buildings blowing up

    How can people love in a world full of hate?
    Such a hateful place this world has become!

    Where can Love Exist??




    Submitted on 2010-07-16 22:29:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Jackie my friend.You are on top of it here.Breakdown.Really feeling the first stanza because it's the portal that took me to the "hateful world" which we live in.In this I see you've become impassive at an extent to where you've been accustom to things that bother you.This is what can make us as humans stronger.We deal with our own [censored]ty issues, eccentricities and what not but WE have to find it in ourselves to love again,something,someone or even the beautiful things all over this world that are scattered.What makes us warriors is that we fight the hate because we don't like to see it.Such as oppression perhaps.You have done something powerful here.I see it if no one else does.I love this.I see it this way J.You start off in your own environment based on the pain that you know that is there within you and then you flip the script...I see you in ur own environment then all of a sudden I see chaos,riots,the way people treat others in violent acts etc.Look at this way J, take the pain in,ball it up.Throw it all into your work.

    How can people love in a world infested with hate? We can only fight back with love.Whats tricky is that we can't let an illusion of love destroy us.The vote came from me.You came with the gun on this one because you were vulnerable and most of all HONEST.Vulnerable because of the questions, they were like reachouts.HONESTY for:

    "Exhausted by these heart wrenching feelings given to me by others.I long to know the feeling of true love."
    Jackie that's quotable.People identify with that.What surprised me was that you could have made it a rant and you didnt and that impressed me based on your effort.

    Remember- So many things to express, so little time.Though there are so many questions because of this global confusion.We who are good deep down all want answers.
    I'm beginning to believe that you may end up reading or commenting on Predator before anyone else on here does.
    I call it like I see it.Keep up the working process.Your a good writer J.

    Peace be with you friend.

    Fav of mine J.Keep working.Peace be with you friend
    | Posted on 2010-07-24 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice write, pretty lady! Your verse echoes thoughts that all of us have had at one time or another, or perhaps still harbor. Where is love, or can it be found, in such a self-centered and hectic world?

    But, we don't have to be loved to love; love begins with self. From there, we can love the beauty of the sunset, the innocence of a child, our favorite ice-cream; love is like a cat; if pursued, it becomes alarmed, shy, and elusive. If one relaxes with confidence, it will come to you and beg for attention. You deserve lots of love, pretty lady, and I'm betting that it is not far away!

    | Posted on 2010-07-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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