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    dots Submission Name: In Zack's book..dots
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    Author: MyWorld
    ASL Info:    21/M/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76/99/87
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I wrote this on a whole mess of drugs. It was written in a friend's blank book which I later recovered. I hope you enjoy it.


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    dotsIn Zack's book..dots
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    Break me down
    tear me apart
    fuck reconstruction
    i'll make a new kind've start
    consumption til gluttony
    ...i follow my heart
    but
    is a heart of ardor
    an art
    enough
    or should i seize that
    part of me
    that breeds
    from the dark in me
    and fuck
    your perception of reality
    this deadly breath
    that radiates outta me
    could sever your senses
    how you now see things
    altered reception
    share this astounding
    profoundness i've found in me.




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      This poem gives me the impression of knowing you have something you could say that would completely ruin someone, and you're holding onto it till you decide what to do. It sounds pretty angry and I like it.
    | Posted on 2010-07-25 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]


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