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    dots Submission Name: Growingdots
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    Author: Rainin_Raspbery
    ASL Info:    22/F/Edmonton/AB/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 145/140/109
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Prose/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 878
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    dotsGrowingdots
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    Fell for the wrong guy,
    I told my self lies,
    To make it all feel alright inside,
    They built up like bricks,
    They fell down like a building.

    Now Iím alone,
    Scoping the world out,
    Figure out coping skills,
    To make it all worth the while
    Im growing, evolutionizing as the old would say.

    Im a young girl,
    Who gave her heart
    To the wrong kind,
    I think time can heal,
    Prepare us for the real future
    Left aside.




    Submitted on 2010-07-17 03:06:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I do not see the relevance of 'left aside' as a last line but the poem as a whole has alot to it that will appeal to a wide audience as we have ALL been there love, and you're take on it is as painful for you as it was for the rest of us. Very nice. MSS x
    | Posted on 2010-07-17 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]


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