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    dots Submission Name: Growingdots

    Author: Rainin_Raspbery
    ASL Info:    22/F/Edmonton/AB/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 145/140/109
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Prose/Being a Teen
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    Fell for the wrong guy,
    I told my self lies,
    To make it all feel alright inside,
    They built up like bricks,
    They fell down like a building.

    Now Iím alone,
    Scoping the world out,
    Figure out coping skills,
    To make it all worth the while
    Im growing, evolutionizing as the old would say.

    Im a young girl,
    Who gave her heart
    To the wrong kind,
    I think time can heal,
    Prepare us for the real future
    Left aside.

    Submitted on 2010-07-17 03:06:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Excellent write Mandee! You have a developing talent at writing that is very visible here.

    The road to true love is sometimes fraught with potholes, and bouncing through them is just a part of the game (it would seem to be). We have all fell for the wrong person and paid a price for it. But, making mistakes makes you wiser, and true love awaits just down the road (with maybe only a few more potholes to bounce through).

    I enjoyed reading your write!
    | Posted on 2010-07-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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