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    dots Submission Name: Underwater citydots

    Author: MysterydarkPoet
    ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157/295/173
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsUnderwater citydots

    take me to your underwater city.

    i'm entirely insane.
    i'll move & try to pass
    without a paddle in either hand.
    but the world will just revolve
    and i'll joke with fireflies & believe 
    it's because your running around 
    in circles. 
    after me.

    take me down. into your underwater city.

    i'm spinning in reverse.
    i do believe in beginnings,
    but not in the start.
    could you tell me what you see?
    I'm afraid my face is falling apart
    And my heart is now out of place
    With intentions lost at sea.

    Drown me. Down. In your underwater city.

    It takes time.
    But I'm sorry my watch won't keep it.
    It takes a heart to love
    And a mind to care
    But time-
    Is not what i have in my hands.
    Blood seeps in, not out
    From this open wound
    & it's something
    No mind or paddle could cure.

    Take me. Drown me. Down. In your underwater city.

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      Im gonna comment on this one too, cuz I think its amazing!! I love the complexity of some of your poems, id say this one is high up there on my ..uhh long favourite list of yours.

    An underwater city, that image is a poem in itself, and you use it like a treasure or something to get lost in, like a ruin, but a place you seem to want to be. That beautiful to me lol. Hmm..what else, lotta confusion, I can always relate a part of me to any one of your poems. My favourite lines though in this one is:

    "Can you tell me what you see?
    I'm afraid my face is falling apart
    And my heart is now out of place"

    It makes me think. It like a loss of feeling for someone, and you cant get it back...maybe thats my mind wandering. Hmm...

    | Posted on 2010-07-27 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]

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