Underwater city -------------------------------------------
take me to your underwater city.
i'm entirely insane.
i'll move & try to pass
without a paddle in either hand.
but the world will just revolve
and i'll joke with fireflies & believe
it's because your running around
in circles.
after me.
take me down. into your underwater city.
i'm spinning in reverse.
i do believe in beginnings,
but not in the start.
could you tell me what you see?
I'm afraid my face is falling apart
And my heart is now out of place
With intentions lost at sea.
Drown me. Down. In your underwater city.
It takes time.
But I'm sorry my watch won't keep it.
It takes a heart to love
And a mind to care
But time-
Is not what i have in my hands.
Blood seeps in, not out
From this open wound
& it's something
No mind or paddle could cure.
Im gonna comment on this one too, cuz I think its amazing!! I love the complexity of some of your poems, id say this one is high up there on my ..uhh long favourite list of yours.
An underwater city, that image is a poem in itself, and you use it like a treasure or something to get lost in, like a ruin, but a place you seem to want to be. That beautiful to me lol. Hmm..what else, lotta confusion, I can always relate a part of me to any one of your poems. My favourite lines though in this one is:
"Can you tell me what you see?
I'm afraid my face is falling apart
And my heart is now out of place"
It makes me think. It like a loss of feeling for someone, and you cant get it back...maybe thats my mind wandering. Hmm...
Submission Name: Underwater city
