Quiet COmpany

Author: in shadow ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581 /277 /103 Words: 83

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Quiet COmpany

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Into carefully congealed cadavers I carve Peeling back the skin Light or dark meat my dear? The liver is good So is the heart Pity the tongue has been removed Along with most of the face TOD sometime last week COD still unknown Contusions Lacerations Something ruptured Bleeding cold blood over latex hands Blunt force trauma Splintering of the bone Just another late night With the late John Doe

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Lmfao Naaiicce. Alot more upbeat (in my eyes) than alot I have read recently. Very original and the structure of it helps to keep a pleasant up tempo. The John Doe line is killer. I am very amused. Well done xD Tip though, think of something more macabre to describe the corpses? I am just sick, the way you did it was more than adequit though. :D

| Posted on 2010-07-17 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]

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