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    dots Submission Name: Quiet COmpanydots
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    Author: in shadow
    ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581/277/103
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsQuiet COmpanydots
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    Into carefully congealed cadavers I carve
    Peeling back the skin
    Light or dark meat my dear?
    The liver is good
    So is the heart
    Pity the tongue has been removed
    Along with most of the face

    TOD sometime last week
    COD still unknown

    Contusions
    Lacerations
    Something ruptured
    Bleeding cold blood over latex hands
    Blunt force trauma
    Splintering of the bone

    Just another late night
    With the late John Doe





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      Lmfao Naaiicce. Alot more upbeat (in my eyes) than alot I have read recently. Very original and the structure of it helps to keep a pleasant up tempo. The John Doe line is killer. I am very amused. Well done xD Tip though, think of something more macabre to describe the corpses? I am just sick, the way you did it was more than adequit though. :D
    | Posted on 2010-07-17 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]


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