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Quiet COmpany

Author: in shadow
ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
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Words: 83
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Quiet COmpany

Into carefully congealed cadavers I carve
Peeling back the skin
Light or dark meat my dear?
The liver is good
So is the heart
Pity the tongue has been removed
Along with most of the face

TOD sometime last week
COD still unknown

Something ruptured
Bleeding cold blood over latex hands
Blunt force trauma
Splintering of the bone

Just another late night
With the late John Doe

Submitted on 2010-07-17 08:34:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Lmfao Naaiicce. Alot more upbeat (in my eyes) than alot I have read recently. Very original and the structure of it helps to keep a pleasant up tempo. The John Doe line is killer. I am very amused. Well done xD Tip though, think of something more macabre to describe the corpses? I am just sick, the way you did it was more than adequit though. :D
| Posted on 2010-07-17 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]

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