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    dots Submission Name: sonnet 1.6dots
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    Author: in shadow
    ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581/277/103
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotssonnet 1.6dots
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    Iíve taken just enough pills to sleep tight
    Step away from my last open bottle

    These things that get me through night after night

    My plastic heart now the perfect model
    Donít think you get to give a damn now, dear

    This silver tongue is laced with razor blades
    just to lick your ego, lace it with fear
    To show you just how these deep scars are made
    To kiss you long and hard so you never
    Forget the bitter and metallic taste

    My last lucid thoughts are gone forever
    This face and other images replaced

    Look here Iíve slipped away, so far away
    Leaving you here with no words left to say





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      I had to reread it several times to let it properly sink in to me. The idea, while not something I try to write about anymore, is one of the more powerful things we can put to paper. I really enjoyed the structure of the write, it flowed very well to me except for the "get give" in the sixth line. Altogether a great piece, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2010-07-18 00:00:00 | by Phall | [ Reply to This ]


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