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    dots Submission Name: Lynndots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 62/89/71
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
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    Description:
       to my beautiful daughter savanna lynn


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    dotsLynndots
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    The wind outside slowly,
    breaks apart my skin...
    But as the tiny hands clenched to my heart,
    squeeze;
    I feel warm and sealed in.
    All the murmurs scratching their way through my ear drums,
    peirce my brain in-
    excruiating pain.
    But the tiny kisses across my face,
    wrap a blanket around my head.
    The road strechted before me,
    gets longer,
    gets darker...
    But these tiny feet padding along next to me;
    keep my ankles from swelling...
    Keeps the road lit and straight.
    And as those arms wrap around me,
    in a loving and warm embrace:
    I know I can keep going;
    fighting with life face to face.
    I know that it will be okay,
    as long as she will be okay.
    Clenching to my heart,
    those tiny hands...
    I'm getting up each day...
    It's mine-
    this love,
    to make her happy...
    To see that smile on her face.
    And it is mine-
    this love,
    to know she's fine,
    taken care of every need.
    And it's mine-
    this love,
    this tiny little girl;
    a beautiful curious wonderful world-
    only she can give me.




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      So, so true.
    | Posted on 2010-10-01 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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