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    dots Submission Name: Read 'Em And Weepdots
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    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 185/164/70
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    One second while i take the knife out of my back
    Thinking back, wondering how this could have happened
    And you wonder why i have a hard time trusting anyone at all
    I was the one that saved you from your deathbed
    A regret, at least among the grand scheme of things
    I should have left you to die right then and there
    (i should have left you to die, i should have left you to die)

    You're a damsel in distress, a mess, in a stained black dress
    You're the very best and playing the victim, playing the victim, playing the victim
    You think you've pulled one over, but if you look a little closer you'll see
    But i've got a card or two up my sleave and before we both leave
    I'm gonna make you read 'em and weep

    It's people like you that have made me question life
    Wondering why it is that some people can be so cold
    You're calloused and calculating to say the very least
    You broke down my walls and made me trust every word
    What hurts, is knowing that while you we're playing the victim
    You were getting ready to victimize me
    (You victimized me, you victimized me)

    I've got a surprise for you that i can't wait for you to see
    It's payback for the all the times you were playing me
    You may have had a good hand but i'm going for the win
    The chips are down and right now there's no giving in
    You're going to regret
    The day we both met
    The way that i have
    You'll pay back the debt

    You owe me
    4x




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      Wow... and no comments DAM this is deep I love everything about it not a single thing I'd change the begining is the best sets the tone for the entire write its a ranting peice and their my favs. I'm sorry your going through a tough time but I can completely relate this I'd have to say mimics my feelings towards my sexually abusive step father. well anyhew thanks for posting this an amazing write

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2010-07-23 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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