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    dots Submission Name: Ash Krullerdots
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    Author: SKillz_Heckle
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Tha BRIARWOOD!!
    Elite Ratio:    6.02 - 268/173/39
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 348
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       Ash Kruller...Killer, or just a man who's looking for the murderer of his son.....the Briarwood Slasher.


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    old man sitting on the porch in a rocking chair
    shot gun on his lap, old cap Hiding all his hair
    He's heard the stories
    about the Briarwood slasher
    the head basher, gut thrasher, throat smasher
    determined to put an end to him
    the old mans finger on a trigger to satisfy his whim
    Sitting behind a bush, is the maniac killer
    the chest driller, the brain spiller, body tiller
    waiting for the man on the porch to make sleep
    so he can slowly and quietly crawl and creep
    but the old man ever still, stays awake
    anticipaiting all the moves the killer will make
    yet the time rolls by and the killer's also still
    with his knife in hand ready to fulfill his will
    a cool breeze hits the man just right
    and the behind the killers bush flashed a beaming light
    reflected from the street lamp to the mans eyes
    finally he stands up ready to laugh as the killer dies
    he brings the gun up aiming at the lights reflection
    but it's just an empty can on further inspection
    the killers not there, and the old man sits back in his chair
    hours pass, the old mans wait is done
    and as he walks in his home
    he finds the dead body of his son
    swearing revenge, he'll kill his enemy
    for the death of this son.....forever hunting his adversary




    Submitted on 2004-07-26 03:50:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...pretty good twist. What appers to be a stand-off ends up being a trick while the killer creeps back to the old man's house and does his dirty deed.

    This would make a really good story length piece all about the rise and fall of these characters. Kind of like the story of this spooky urban legend. Yeah, thats what this reminds me of. A modern day legend. Something told around a campfire.
    | Posted on 2004-07-29 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      looked like rap lyrics. but its all very confusing to me. but i've got led zeppelin playing loudly so that could've knocked my head. anyways, great imagery, and tho i dont know what its exactly about. but i thought this would make a great story.

    Zu
    | Posted on 2004-07-26 00:00:00 | by Zu | [ Reply to This ]


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