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    dots Submission Name: Lolz.dots
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    Author: MrBear
    ASL Info:    19/M/Ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 59/109/48
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsLolz.dots
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    dying of boredum,
    so i wrote you a poem,
    a turtle without a shell,
    is it naked or homeless?

    my sanity i think i need to evaulate
    visited dr.phil, but he cannot elaborate
    a rabbit walks into a bakery
    what does it order? a carrot cake.

    im up in the club raining money on the hizzoes,
    hoes expecting the drizzles
    watch out for rainbows,
    get hit with some skittles!

    im not making any sense,
    like a penguin wearing a tuxedo
    or a guy in a speedo,
    bulging like a torpedo

    ~ Teddy Dayton ~




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