Erasing Words -------------------------------------------
Somehow erasing words seems evil,
so even if I write in pencil
I can't bring myself to erase
the words that I abhor
because getting them
out of my sleepy mind
is too much work,
and writing your name
and whisking it away
feels like an act of murder.
I don't know about it being evil but I do relate to what you are saying. It is actually a pretty interesting thought. Once you write a person's name and then erase it, it's like erasing the record of their existance. It used to be that people had one name they used and the real one which they kept secret. There was considered to be great power in a name and keeping in secret ensured no one could cast a spell or harm you...
My, my..I sure read a lot into this one. I liked it!
This is a very interesting piece, one that everyone on this site can relate to in way or another. As always, you bare the bones of subtle issues, exposing the obvious and yet demanding we look deeper to see what it is there that is hiding, smirking, back at us.
I loved the metaphor of the eraser as a lethal weapon---that is original and so succinct.
I have boxes of scribbled-upon paper, rather loosely stapled in bundles with a highlighted X through the top page--describing which poem was spawned from each raggedy bunch---I can't bring myself to burn them,--and now I know why---
arrrgh i hate erasing, revising, crossing out.. even though i know that good usually can come from it. that's what they'll tell you... ponder it. i have begun to revise though using a method passed to me from someone good; she told me "sit with the poem for a couple of weeks. if you still like it then keep it." i still keep hard copies of what i wrote before...
Absolutely beautiful. I love this. I use a pen when I write so I NEVER erase, only update. But I like to see what I originally wrote and how far I came to the final draft. I love the ending - that is classic. "And writing your name And whisking it away Feels like an act of murder" Love it! --blt
Yeah, my old girlfriend used to feel the same way about it, but I rarely do. But I have really bad hand writing, and my hand cramps really easily when I write, so I almost exclusively type my work. Perhaps it is the typed words that make it so easy for me to erase entire stanzas and lose them forever. I think it's best that way though. If I'm not satisfied, I ditch it and move on with only the slightest contemplation. It was harder at first, but it gets easy. It helps me to look forward. I also change my writes constantly, only occasionally keeping a print out of the old form when I'm not sure about the cvhanges. I always think about Willy C. Williams. He took years to rewrite his poems before they were good enough to get published, or good enough for him. I understand that you still edit, but you just don't get rid of the originals, or even a single word from them. I like this little poem, even if it is a little unstable with a superfluence of hyperbole.
there's so much of this that i can relate to right now, as a poet with severe writer's block (dare i jinx myself by calling me by that name?) and as a person who has trouble erasing words written in pencil on cheap paper that i might as well have just thrown away. your pieces always have so much more in them in spirit though there is so little in the physical (translation: there's so much more you didn't write that i read into what you did write and it makes me happy to be thoughtful after reading poetry) thanks for sharing. =]
this takes me back to memory lane when i was in school and my art teacher told us to put away our erasers saying words to the effect of "the eraser is the death of the sketch"... well, it sounded better in the language he said... i enjoyed reading this poem
This is kinda interesting - again a good idea. A bit shocking - but this is a big plus to it, though I must admit, that it's not that best of you. It seems so... 'routine' (I couldn't find any other word :P). Well, comparing to other pieces you wrote and I read.
i really like the idea of this. i do my crossword puzzles in ink, can you believe it?! strange... anyway, it's like learah told me once about editing a poem, sometimes it does feel like murder or like having a face lift or something. what comes out at the beginning is usual the raw and uncut version from the soul. sometimes editing is needed, i do understand that, but this poem speaks to leaving it be. i like the ending, 'cause it feels very appropos to what you are saying. just erasing someone's name can feel that way. is this is an oldie or a newie? either way, i like!
Hmmm...I'm getting a distinct impression of your style, and I like it. My comment for this piece would be much like everyone else's, particularly GOBALATA's, who sums it up nicely. I will likely remember this every time I cross out or erase a name.
You don't have jewish blood do you? They have this view of writing...it actually shows in the Bible. I know that one rabbi wrote God's name on a piece of paper by accident and has kept it in his pocket ever since. I wonder what he'll do if his wife washes the shirt with that piece of paper accidentally left in the pocket. I enjoyed this.
you have a great mind. the way you take topics and write poems on them is really great. who could've written a poem on erasing words, except you i mean. it is rather a pain in the ass to erase words written b a pencil, but i have to agree with the others the last three lines were memorable.
I usually don't write with a pencil but last time I did. and it felt strange to erase words. cause I can't do it when I write with a pen. anyway you see your poem keeps me thinking. I like that. and I have to agree with the others those last 3 lines are great, they linger in your mind.