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    dots Submission Name: The shot missed round the worlddots

    Author: Raistlin Sith
    ASL Info:    22/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 106/182/66
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       i'm in that writing mood again.

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    dotsThe shot missed round the worlddots

    there's an elite group
    of the best at causing pain,
    One standing tallest,
    flushing lessers down the drain

    So far I've fought them all
    and not come out with a win,
    If I used the greatest steroids,
    I'd still lose yet again

    better seen than heard,
    and only in the dark,
    left to calm the oceans
    with nothing but a spark

    This road could shock the world,
    a retirement is near
    but one thing is for certain,
    They don't care I was here.

    Submitted on 2010-07-20 17:48:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved this, it was so original. I don't know what to say more on it no gripes, just praises for this piece.

    Thanks for sharing,
    | Posted on 2011-08-10 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      mm this is a sad realization. I like that its not terribly long and you get to the point you were indeed in a writing mood but hey nothing wrong with that people come up with some of the bests posts then

    Nicely Written
    | Posted on 2010-07-23 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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