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    dots Submission Name: Steam, Created.dots
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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    27 Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261/310/148
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 558
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       only a certain few are fascinating enough to write about..


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    dotsSteam, Created.dots
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    Fraudulent omission, I can accept
    that which is not willing to be spoken
    as your eyes have already engraved it--
    somehow with mischievous honesty--
    into a part unreached by hands alone.

    Repelled, depleted defenses are crumbling
    as you hide your compliments underneath
    casual sentences and wayward glances,
    sidelong advances and plundered truths.

    With open ears I listen intently for the next,
    the one after, and then another after that,
    when you give yourself away inconspicuously
    as I remain the obvious fool, in love.




    Submitted on 2010-07-21 11:05:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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