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    dots Submission Name: Keep On Movingdots
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    Author: Indelible_ink
    ASL Info:    20/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.75 - 143/109/25
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 601
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       My boyfriend broke up with me.....over text message. Something about me not communicating enough and how it's unfixable.....riiiight, that's the reason. *sigh* I know 21 is a bit old for a first boyfriend but I just feel a little broken. Of course, my poem is inspired by this. I never thought I'd write a break-up poem.


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    dotsKeep On Movingdots
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    Iím feeling pain but itís just a season
    Iíve stop searching for all the reasons
    I looked for a rock to keep me stable
    Life came at me and turned the tables
    Now I have a mountain that needs moving
    Iíve got a heart that needs some soothing

    I feel like Iím falling when everythingís steady
    I travel this road that seems earthquake ready
    I forgot what was mine, what was priceless
    Gave away my heart and now Iím lifeless
    Iím left with regret but I mainly feel stupid
    Trusted the wrong people, trusted cupid

    We all make mistakes but the point is recognizing
    Pointing a finger is just another way of hiding
    I made mistakes but I still kept on fighting
    Those who give up, you wonít find in writing
    So Iíll keep moving even if Iím hurting
    Iím wiser now but I wonít stop learning




    Submitted on 2010-07-22 02:48:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Let me start off by saying that 21 is not to old for a first boyfriend. If you are really mature for your age and hadn't found anyone in the city you were living in that you wanted to date. Then you didn't nothing you can do to help your feelings. I wouldn't put it on here though that your first boyfriend was at age 21.

    As for the poem it seems that even though this was your first break up you are a good enough writer to write a poem that seems like it is just another break up that hurt and that you have learned that you will get over it and life will go on. So I have to give you props for that part of it.

    Sorry for your pain though
    | Posted on 2010-07-23 00:00:00 | by DemonofHeaven | [ Reply to This ]


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