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    dots Submission Name: Subliminal BullHockeydots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 403
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 597



    Description:
       Iamtheonlyonewhowilladmittolikingouroldcoach
    andeveryonewoulddisownmeiftheyknewidid
    Shemadeusgreatandallournewcoachdoesismakeusweak
    Shesympathizeswhereshesouldpushandcomfortswheresheshouldscream
    Lovedoesnotmakeateam
    Iknowitsbullshittowritepoetryaboutfieldhockey
    buticanthelpititssofuckingstressfulandmakesmesoangry

    Youshouldnttaketimetoreadanyofthis


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    dotsSubliminal BullHockeydots
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    You tell us one thing
    While implying another

    We Just Aren't Good Enough

    The words fog my eyes
    But i refuse to cry

    And Give Them That Satisfaction

    Don't sugarcoat the bad news
    Run us in circles until we collapse

    Anything Would Be Better Than This

    But This is reality
    Pain is reality

    There Is No Where To Hide

    I slip into the car
    To your voice of reassurance

    And The Tears Begin To Fall







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    ||| Comments |||
      "Not good enough" is more a question of where your spirit is rather than where your physical ability and talent for any given venture appears to be at a particular moment. There is no shame in getting your asses kicked in any "game" if you are doing your part and simply fall short of what a particular monster you are facing manages on a given day. Sometimes your own coach can become the monster but that's a personal failure of theirs, not a team one.

    But always remember, if it's not a game, there are no rules!
    | Posted on 2010-08-28 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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