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    dots Submission Name: Such Dreams.dots
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    Author: MysterydarkPoet
    ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157/295/173
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSuch Dreams.dots
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    a heart bleeds.

    but i dreamt last night
    that my heart could fly,
    & drift above the trees
    lay in the clouds and cocoon itself
    like a caterpillar in the winter.

    but when it's name was called
    only the colours of the rainbow would bloom.

    for the love in any heart could not define
    nor contain any such beauty
    than that which is you.





    Submitted on 2010-07-23 05:19:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like what you have so far..it leaves me wondering a little though. Perhaps it could be lengthened a little..
    | Posted on 2010-07-29 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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