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Such Dreams.

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 69
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Such Dreams.

a heart bleeds.

but i dreamt last night
that my heart could fly,
& drift above the trees
lay in the clouds and cocoon itself
like a caterpillar in the winter.

but when it's name was called
only the colours of the rainbow would bloom.

for the love in any heart could not define
nor contain any such beauty
than that which is you.

Submitted on 2010-07-23 05:19:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really like what you have so leaves me wondering a little though. Perhaps it could be lengthened a little..
| Posted on 2010-07-29 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]

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