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    dots Submission Name: Nose Bleeddots
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    Author: nicodemous
    ASL Info:    7-5-82/M/Hell
    Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 283/221/121
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       Just a funny little love poem I wrote not too long ago. Somethig light to get back on here with after a two year absence.


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    Youíre the cutest dork that Iíve ever seen
    You could be my otaku queen

    Been up all night, gotta confess
    Watching ninja battles, and FAN SERVICE

    Haremís Horror with a touch of divine
    Action, comedies, they go the whole nine

    Self made outcasts that few can understand
    All because we watch cartoons from Japan

    So I was thinking maybe if you like
    We could get together and watch some tonight




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      Hope you don't mind my linking this to my girlfriend, as it's the literal display of my perspective based on her.
    If she likes it as much as I did, I wish you to know that I'll be memorizing and reciting it for the next...oh, I don't know, century or so (that is, if I live to age 117 years).
    | Posted on 2015-04-04 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      so I kinda wonder what what you'd think about couplets. I enjoy the relative lack of punctuation, however I still want a certain amount of pause between the references. Maybe?

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    Youíre the cutest dork that Iíve ever seen
    You could be my otaku queen

    Been up all night, gotta confess
    Watching ninja battles, and FAN SERVICE

    Haremís Horror with a touch of divine
    Action, comedies, they go the whole nine

    Self made outcasts that few can understand
    All because we watch cartoons from Japan

    So I was thinking maybe if you like
    We could get together and watch some tonight

    *

    A thought, anyway. I especially like the starting line because it is actually quite ordinary. In fact, this is something my boyfriend would say though the emphasis would be different and this is where it gets unique. Your examples of why this person is the cutest dork you've ever seen is wholly yours/hers (assuming it's a her) and it makes for a delightful little poem of appreciation for another completely as they are.

    Nicely done.

    -Emeya
    | Posted on 2010-07-25 00:00:00 | by Lady of Shalott | [ Reply to This ]


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