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    dots Submission Name: Deja vudots
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    Author: Joachim
    ASL Info:    75 Male RSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 361/264/178
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 625
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 508



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       The Past is the Future becomes the Future Past. jm


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    dotsDeja vudots
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    Deja vu

    Shimmering in the Dark
    Recesses Of my Mind,
    There Lurks a Phantasm
    Warped in itís Cloak
    Of Obscurity.

    Flapping its Dark Wings
    Stirring the Dark Currents
    of my Mind
    Into Ghastly Figurines
    Etched Handsomely.

    Come forth O Dark One
    Into My Light
    Caress my Soul
    Be Changed by the Light
    Of my Love.

    That Never Ceases.

    Love is Forever!




    Submitted on 2010-07-25 04:16:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My favourite and so beautiful. Unbelievable how so few words can be so powerful and carry so much meaning.

    It is indeed brave, not only to challenge that dark side, but there is bravery in merely admitting that it is there. Too many people completely avoid it and pretend that it is not there at all. It gives them a (false) sense of security.

    Reminds me of eastern philosophy, the ying yang in particular. That balance it speaks of; in every good there is something bad, in everything bad there is something good.

    Once again, brilliant!

    | Posted on 2011-07-15 00:00:00 | by TiaanK | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah yes, brave and bold to challenge so. There is balance to consider, unless you would go forward unbalanced for a walk. Feel free to invite the dark side of your nature out so as to know it better, but it would not be there without a purpose, and it is not to be transformed so much as recognized and lived with. In this the title is telling.
    | Posted on 2010-10-04 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah! I understand this. You put into words something I never could write about. I ought to look more at this topic, now that I am older!
    | Posted on 2010-08-19 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel as if I am not good enough to comment on this peace, for I am but a lowly writing, yet you seem so far advanced in your writing skills. ANy thing I have to say you already know, so I will at least say this, it was beyond good! You have skill! I wouldn't change a thing about this peace.
    | Posted on 2010-07-29 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]


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