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    dots Submission Name: Who ARE you????dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Angry
    Total Views: 683
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1188



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    dotsWho ARE you????dots
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    Who are you to tell me to move on
    Who are you to tell me to forget it, it's the past??

    You know me so little yet you feel you have
    The right
    The authority
    The..the... nerve to try and TELL ME!
    How to live my life...

    Mind you the same life you gave up on when My Mother
    Your ex wife made it difficult for you to see your OWN KIDS
    Being the little bitch you are
    You threw your arms up and walked away!
    As if we meant nothing to you

    How ironic we're in such a predicament now?!

    All I ask of you...
    Put yourself in my shoes Father

    Being sexually abused by a Step Father
    Your Mother having full knowledge of this and yet does NOTHING
    Then putting him in prison
    Just to regret that choice daily
    SOO much so ...

    You put a 12gauge to your stomach and NOW you live with the scars of a Soiled Suicide

    Then have someone fucking tell you to move on
    and forget it

    FUCK YOU!




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      Has he read this? Have you given it to him to read? If so and he says nothing then you at least know that you gave him every chance to know how you felt what he's done and every chance to make the choice to change his attitude and help or to continue to be blind and turn away as if it has nothing to do with him.
    In the end you are NOT responsible for the actions of the adults in your life as a child. You are NOT responsible for the actions of so called family members lack of integrity and morals to take responsiblilty now.
    You gave every oppertunity to them for them to act right and be where you needed them to be and to be what you needed of them to be.
    IT"S their loss.
    Always here
    Heather
    | Posted on 2010-07-31 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      I know all too well how you felt when writing this...it was my mothers reaction when i told what was happening in my family too..

    It is not so easy as people think to let it go even when it is for your own benefit in the long run..

    24 yrs later i now have a wonderful partner who has been patient enough to get through all the tears & to allow me to feel whatever it is that i feel ...to understand

    and even when she cant understand she is willing to just to sit and to hold me..it is amazing...after all the years of counselling, psychotherapy etc...the only thing that really heals is time and understanding..

    whilst you feel you have none it is very hard to look at it and let it go...but you will with time...hang in there..it does get better

    your father unfortunately has only added to the issues you need to deal with when he should have lightened them...perhaps he is unable or does not know how to deal with it...abuse affects everyone involved
    | Posted on 2010-07-29 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
       i noticed the blog post saying you felt like you were in a rut with your poems. It can be tough dealing with these emotions, believe me I know. Personally for me, trying to organize my thoughts into a specific rhyme scheme helps immensely. It usually leaves me emotionally drained afterwards, and i can leave it alone for a bit. Most of the time I've tried to use a freeform style, I didn't like my work. Hope it helps.

    For this particular poem, it seemed a little scattered. you kinda bounce around subjects and don't really explain your current predicament to let the reader know how it is similar. It is obvious that you are upset, and I liked the flow of the poem.
    | Posted on 2010-07-28 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]
      My honest first impression was that a 12 gauge to your stomach is a cry for help. I am truly sorry that it doesn't seem as though anyone answered that cry. But, the past is over. You can't change it or take it back. And, I don't expect you to forget it, but, you have to let go of it. You should be the person that you want to be not the person that your experiences have made you. A lot of people have been through similar experiences and not a one of them claims it to be easy.. But, it is worth it to be all that you want to.
    | Posted on 2010-07-25 00:00:00 | by MyWorld | [ Reply to This ]


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