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    dots Submission Name: The Game of Sanctitydots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Game of Sanctitydots

    Love, judged by what it can provide
    It’s security of comfort
    And the daily provisions of “ in case I have not ”

    Love, the matrimonial commodity
    Of bartered souls
    For the trade in of ideal lives

    Love, a fuck me pornography
    Embellished by furniture, fast cars and houses
    A virtual consumer-market banquette

    Love, an agreement not to love
    But sign its contract
    Of self betterment
    And judged by what it can provide
    The comforts of security
    And the lifetime’s pretensions of “ in case I have not ”


    Love, denied in a heartbeat
    As a waste in the sand
    And cut from those dreams
    No longer recognised

    Love, weeping within the intractable wish
    It can never touch
    Or force from itself
    One moment of truth

    Love, delicate under the weight
    The noose it’s expectation
    And lest we forget

    The anguish we create

    The game of sanctity
    When we buy and sell
    Each other

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      the world can be this way and their are many who profess love...they say true love is very hard to find..but perhaps it is just hard to be open to it in such a harsh world...this gives me ideas to write about thank you
    | Posted on 2010-07-30 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to say that I disagree with your views on love. A lot of the things that you describe are behaviors meant to give the impression of love, but when love is real you know it. It is beautiful, and fleeting. It's intense, and when you've been touched by it, you never forget.
    | Posted on 2010-07-28 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]

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