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    dots Submission Name: the miracle of locomotiondots
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    Author: WhatYouWill
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    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    dotsthe miracle of locomotiondots
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    it strikes me today, suddenly:
    I am walking
    right now
    right at this instant
    and it is astounding how I take each step
    against the gravity of the whole earth

    with this revelation comes a consciousness of my legs
    which flow like broken waterfalls from the craggy cliffs of my hips
    and I am amazed that I have these miraculous, beautiful legs
    that reach all the way down to the ground

    and feet, too
    wonderfully soft and grubby feet
    slightly sticky from the long day's journey
    raw like two slabs of meat

    and toes,
    toes clinging to the cloth of my socks and the soles of my sandals
    rejoicing in the small unnoticed task
    of keeping my unruly body in balance

    and I have knees too
    scabby with long-forgotten scars

    and bruised shins
    from this rough-and-tumble world

    and toenails that scratch strangely at the ground
    when I forget to clip them

    and I have heels too,
    and soles of the feet,
    and flesh that sits beneath the skin,
    and muscles that push and pull and tug
    and bones that keep me proud and tall

    and I have all of this wonderful machinery
    just to wind my weary way
    towards you




    Submitted on 2010-07-27 00:42:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is great--

    i like how you broke down the body in such unpoetic form...lol

    as far as "craggy cliffs of my hips"

    "raw like two slabs of meat"

    very creative and fresh...

    and a nicely symmetrical piece of poetry.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-06-07 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. I have had similar feelings/thoughts about walking.

    It's one of those things we take for granted - thank God we don't actually have to think about our steps so much as we go, though we can regulate and them, like our breathing.

    It can come almost as a revelation when we actually realize we are walking and take the time to consider it more carefully.

    It's because of this I have nothing to offer in the way of criticism.

    I especially like "the craggy cliffs of my hips."

    soul-hugger
    | Posted on 2010-07-27 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]


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