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    dots Submission Name: He isnít asking anymore ( July 19 2010)dots

    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHe isnít asking anymore ( July 19 2010)dots

    Please, please, please, it never felt so wrong before,
    to hear those words once polite but after this nevermore.
    Up against a wall hot breath against her ear,
    heís begging for it nicely the last time sheíll ever hear
    please, please, please thrown down against the bed.
    Heíll treat her like a Queen as heís often said
    begging isnít custom but for her heíll make it so,
    heíll keep her with him always his little whore for none to know.
    Please, please, please his hand against her throat,
    body pressing oh-so heavy cutting breath as he moans,
    please, please, please the words forever changed
    his hands pressed against flesh, her body on display
    please, please, please heís asking nicely only once
    offering the world if only for her touch.
    Give your body, give your soul, for a world of luxury
    please, please, please, the nicest rapist ever seen,
    he took to flowers and to kisses,
    he took to begging on his knees,
    her body against the wall, his lips whispering
    please, please, please. Itíll never be the same,
    struggling and fighting not wanting to be caged
    please, please, please sheís screaming let me go
    thrust against the wall he isnít asking anymore
    please, please, please it never felt so wrong before
    to hear all this kindness being slammed against the floor
    please, please, please, he isnít asking anymore.

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    ||| Comments |||
      het and hi i am glad i read this
    you hear so many people in this predicament
    the rape subject is not something to take lightly but i find alot of people either dont care or say oh well
    good write and i hope lots of people read it

    | Posted on 2010-07-28 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      The last line really tops it off ..
    I'd like to ask though... is this about domestic rape.. or just rape in general.
    The words come alive, and i like that you repeated "please, please, please".. i think it emphasized the irony where he's sweet talking her right before raping her.
    Keep it up :)

    - Black Rose
    | Posted on 2010-07-27 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]

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