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    dots Submission Name: Sonnet - The Character Is Fog: Reviseddots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 75/182/217
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsSonnet - The Character Is Fog: Reviseddots
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    Sorrow, the tempest weeping so weakly,
    familiarities - dreaming a dream.
    Anguish, earth-shattering pain - obliquely,
    insularities - bound and trapped screaming.

    Shade- face in reflection; memory: Gone.
    Wandering misconceptions, who are you?
    Wraith- Come harbinger, bring me to Charon
    dredging the water's soul, great bugaboo.

    Drowning in our descent to Hell, see light.
    Shining bright, it seems to kill us with smog.
    Our holy right -- crumbling tripolite,
    blowing in the wind the character: Fog

    Today is dawn, fear our pariah's cloud.
    The dusk tomorrow shall reveal its shroud.




    Submitted on 2010-07-27 17:33:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Im very surprised that you don't have more comments on this. I think people are just to afraid. I found it very breath taking, I loved it all the way. Im not good at understanding poetry so I don't know what its about. but Im sure that other people do.
    I remember all the hard work my oldest brother would put into his sonnets, so I know it takes skill. And skill you have. Great peace of writing! wouldn't change a thing! I only wish I was smart enough to give you a comment you diserve!
    | Posted on 2010-07-29 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]


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