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    dots Submission Name: Weight of Your Emotionsdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWeight of Your Emotionsdots
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    It's about that time now
    It's come around again
    But each is worse than the last
    From where we both began
    More without you than in the past

    And if I could have you forever
    I think that I might
    But no matter how tempting it is
    Couldn't decide tonight
    Why is something wrong with this

    I can imagine the endings well
    And I want to be with you
    But where ever my ending can take me
    Hints mistakes when it's through
    With no regards to where my heart may be

    And I do not like where I'm at
    I do not like this place and time
    But still I wish it would just stand still
    I know well it won't rewind
    Compare past to present, it felt so real

    And if time plays its course
    Which I expect it will
    The world around will change like weather
    No matter what I feel
    I know I'll lose one forever
    But don't want to wait until
    We may start and end together
    Feels as if this love could kill
    But anything must be better
    Emotions, choices so surreal




    Submitted on 2010-07-27 18:53:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can really feel the confustion of trying to decide weather or not to stay with the person you are with.

    "And if I could have you forever
    I think that I might
    But no matter how tempting it is
    Couldn't decide tonight"

    i felt this peace was pretty emotional and deep in the discion the person in the poem was having to face. its a good write. i suspect you will hav many good comments on this
    | Posted on 2010-07-29 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]


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