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    dots Submission Name: My White Knighgtdots
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    Author: trynfinity
    ASL Info:    38/f/California
    Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 149/145/91
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 619
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1260



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       So this isn't how we planned things
    where we thought in life we'd be.
    Though some things we may have changed
    there is no other place in life for me.


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    dotsMy White Knighgtdots
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    This isn't how we planned things
    what we wanted out of life.
    After eighteen years together
    you're still my hero, my white knight.
    ~
    I still run to you to save me
    look for you to catch me when I fall.
    You still make life worth living
    you're still the best part of it all.
    ~
    I know it hasn't been easy
    I know I've let you down.
    Through it all you still love me
    I don't know why you've stuck around.
    ~
    I love you without condition
    without thought it's just what is.
    Never understanding why things happen
    no matter what I can't give in.
    ~
    You're still my shinning hero
    my white knight who saves the day.
    I'm grateful for the chance to love you
    it's been worth it in every way.
    ~
    So this isn't how we planned things
    where we thought in life we'd be.
    Though some things we may have changed
    there is no other place in life for me.
    ~
    Except right here with my hero
    fighting the world in every way.
    By your side however I can be
    forever always....... everyday.




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      Hi. My White Knight... . This is very real fantasy fairy-land sentimental ever-in-love and no-regrets-love story that comes very rare and not often found.
    Of course I loved it because it never came true for me.
    Regards. Joachim
    | Posted on 2010-08-14 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved this peace! discribing the hardships and joy of sticking together so long. yet you two are still happy together and you two still look to eachother dispight past mistakes. i think this is a perfect discription of a long lasting relationship.
    great job. you are a very talented writer. i wouldnt change a thing about this peace. i think its perfect! it shows people that being together forever doesnt mean its all gonna be happy times, but if you truly love eachother and stick it out, you can still be happy with eachother
    | Posted on 2010-07-29 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]


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